~Katie's cuties [update September 13th 2013!]
HappyThoughts:
anybody ever watch mysterysciencetheater? At the end of the shows theme song they say, "if you wonder how he eats or breathes or other science facts: just repeat to yourself its just a show I should really just relax" I dug your story without the added info. But I did learn some things by reading all the extra details. lol just giving you a hard time. 1club
Katie:
Er.... how did any of that relate to my mini story? Is the show name really one word? :confused:
But thanks ;D
Theraven:
You can write things even if you don't have a picture of it, Katie ;). In fact, that's often better.
If you know something happens, but the reader doesn't know since you don't write it, then it might as well never have happened in the story. If you write "He is not breathing" then the reader thinks he's not breathing. If you write "He is barely breathing" or "he has troubles breathing" instead, then it makes much more sense.
I tend to re-write the text until I'm mostly happy with it, then take pictures, and then do the final editing to the text so that everything fits together. If there is an important part of the story that I struggle to do a picture for, then I either rewrite the part so it's easier, or simply don't put in a picture right there.
Katie:
What are you talking about...? I never write off things I have a picture of? I suck at taking pictures. I write from my own thoughts. I've never written anything based off a picture.
I wrote it exactly as I meant it.
Anything I re-write is terrible. Really bad. I always stick with the first thing. I've tried to re-write things before and they turn out MUCH worse than the original.
Sample: Sitting by herself on the edge of the dock, Emily wondered wether today's events had been real. She rubbed her forhead, hoping for proof that nothing had happened. Shocked, a breath slid out quickly, making a soft noise. There was nothing there. Then, she turned to look behind her. She had been expecting her little brother to run and push her in. She had forgotten that he was dead. "I miss him." She told herself. She looked down in the water, and she noticed it was blood red. She jumped up, and her leg gave way. She fell in. The bandage that had been there previously wasn't there, she'd taken it off. Her leg was bleeding freely into the lake. She struggled against the waves. Her head slammed up and into the dock. Remembering that she had nothing and no one, she gave up. It wasn't until moments later that he found her. "Emily!" He shrieked. He jumped into the water and saw her plummeting into the depths. He grabbed her by the shoulders and shoved her toward the surface. "Luke!" She screamed, seeing him beside her. "Are you okay?" Luke asked her. "F-fine." She mumbled. Luke nodded, then hugged her with all his might as she cried.
Theraven:
As all good writers say - writing is rewriting ;)
There never would have been three movies called "Toy Story" if they had not re-written a big part of the plot in the first movie. If Toy Story had been scrapped, Pixar would most likely have had to shut down and probably never again made an animated movie. Did you know that?
I don't always rewrite everything, but I do look over a text at least twice, and often ten to even a hundred times (depending on whether I'm happy with the 2nd edition or if I'm still unhappy about something the 99th version). I treat the first edition as the basic idea. The editing I do is everything from minor grammar to write entirely new parts, or rewrite what I already have so that it sounds better.
If I had not rewritten LFB, it would have ended on around 20 chapters, and looked really crappy... Rewriting often gives me ideas, and several times I've ended up rewriting a couple of lines so that they form an entirely new chapter on several pages.
And I meant that you can write things even if you don't have a picture of it, or don't know how to do the picture. I do that once in a while, but since I have loads of pictures, no one notice ;)
And I think that sample looks really good, actually.
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