Sim Generations- Generation 1- Moving Day

[TheRandomTeam]

Read the chapter at: http://asimstory.blogspot.com/

[caffeinated.joy]

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[JacobM]

hmm it's ok, interesting plot. but i think it is more like a stream of dialogue from a movie than an actual story. maybe if you write in paragraphs, narrating what's happening from a 'narrators view' (yours), or from just allisons view, matts view, or anyone elses view, you know.
umm maybe you shouldn't put 'allison: (what she says here)' and 'matt: (what he says here)' etc.
and just write it like an actual story i don't know. i hope i helped though.