Murda/Urban Gangstas - 10/23/2007 - Update - The Road Splits In The Courtroom
LissaS:
WOW,.........WOW! Junior is soooo sharp! He got his own father questioning himself.....WOW! The way I see it junior definitely has a plan up his sleeve and he's puttin it all together. He is just like his father but to me it looks like he's using it for the better instead of worse. He's slowly outsmarting his father and I can see this being a HUGE battle at the end between Junior and his father. It's already starting to begin it seems, cause his father still has a plan as far as going overseas. Ronnie REALLY surprised me when he said "Show him mercy"........... My mouth dropped. Right now all I can still say is WOW........WOW!
vita4all:
Hi Readers!
Coffee House Chat time! :coffee2:
I wanted to give some feedback to your insightful comments, rather than wait another two or three days before the next update is ready.
Important Message! I've started minor edits on early chapters, and added a few photos. I think you'll like the 3 fresh new pictures in Chapter 1 and Ch. 6. The one of Chan and Ronnie having dinner is kind of funnyand it's worth a peak.
The only dialogue I changed was in Ch. 1 - improved for the better, without changing the story. Exception: in the original Ch 1, Raheem said he was 'top dawg in his 'hood." As the story evolved, we know this isn't true. He's much more than that and has global connections. Thus Ch. 1 was edited to reflect this. Minor edits elsewhere, feel free as usual to enjoy racy debates here!
Okay, pass the Swiss Miss to add in my coffee:
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From Tenshii - "Raheem was right about one thing from the beginning: Junior did have it in him from the very start...One's gotta wonder if he's forming his own "army""
Raheem is the brilliant anti-hero we love to hate. He's right about a lot of things, but does Junior have him fooled, or has Junior joined him in evil? And don't you feel sorry for Ronnie? Just when he's ready to move on, his 'freedom' is being negotiated between Raheem and Junior as though he were a slave. What do they say? Ain't no leaving or escaping the mob. We'll see...
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From Veckah: "What does it say that even Satan himself is becoming truly wary of his own offspring?"
Oh Veckah! The neighbors can still hear me laughing from your observation... I love it!
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From Icekoolkat: I think he (Junior) will make a good husband because he saved himself for her and only her (Rita).
What Rita and Junior have going for them is they share the same religious values and are deeply, passionately, truly in love, plus he likes her. He's not fickle either. However, there are a quite a few wild cards that could do them in, from his rigidity, to their families, to family planning issues, and of course, to whatever crazy sh*t Junior has planned up his sleeve regardng his 'travel plans."
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From Moon: He (Junior) is just like his father but to me it looks like he's using it for the better instead of worse... I can see this being a HUGE battle at the end....
Junior has a rep all thru the story of being sneaky by his brothers, father, and even Ronnie. Just what is Junior's real agenda? Hmmmmmm. The iceberg photo in Ch.73/Pt1 may be a clue... :scratch:
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Quite a few of you were surprised that Ronnie showed mercy to another prisoner. If you think about it, it's fairly consistent with his character, from back in juvie when he protected Chan in the bathroom, simply because it was the decent thing to do. He's struggling to hang onto his heart in this cold world. Wish Ronnie luck - he's gonna need it.
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kevinlipimp:
Vita, your story is so good. The last chapter was intense and funny as hell, espcially the newspaper pic and Junior doing a talk show. It's the cup of coffee he was holding that cracked me up with the title! Where do you get these ideas? They're hilarious! So were the ridiculous fruity prison uniforms. It's like your story is serious and real as hell but funny too. I like the new photos you added in the whole story and the first chapter. The pic of Crazy 8 getting beat with the real looking belt was so real and sad-scary. It was a good idea to add new photos. The one of Ronnie looking stoned - I'm using that as a screensaver.
Junior's outdoing his dad and Raheem better watch his back. I can't wait to see what happens next!
Liv:
Ok, so I am like on Ch. 10 and am already hooked! Wonderful story! I will surely becoming back to get caught up!
Tenshii~Akari:
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Raheem is the brilliant anti-hero we love to hate. He's right about a lot of things, but does Junior have him fooled, or has Junior joined him in evil? And don't you feel sorry for Ronnie? Just when he's ready to move on, his 'freedom' is being negotiated between Raheem and Junior as though he were a slave. What do they say? Ain't no leaving or escaping the mob. We'll see...
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I don't think, I know Junior has him fooled. (Yeah... I don't "know" know, but from everything I've read about him up until now, he definitely knows how to work his way around and manipulate things to suit his plans) Anytime Satan second guesses himself on how he really reads Junior, there's definitely someting up. Let's see how Raheem can figure out the true nature of his kids now. :smile bi:
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Quite a few of you were surprised that Ronnie showed mercy to another prisoner. If you think about it, it's fairly consistent with his character, from back in juvie when he protected Chan in the bathroom, simply because it was the decent thing to do. He's struggling to hang onto his heart in this cold world. Wish Ronnie luck - he's gonna need it.
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From the previous that you stated above this quote, you asked did I feel sorry for Ronnie... that's an absolute yes. :( Everything you've said about Raheem and Junior talking about him and the other boys/men in whatever way Junior wants to utilize them is too true. They talk as if they own every bit of their souls... :smt120
I wasn't too surprised at Ronnie's generosity... like you mentioned, he did it for Chan, and in a few more ways, he also did it for Raven and Kareem. Though, in the situation with the lack of respect from the big-mouthed inmate named Jason, I was sure anyone would've lost their cool right then. :lol: I don't wish only Ronnie the luck, but EVERYONE in this maturing situation is going to need it, in this story and in RL situations similar to Ronnie's. (Mainly, all the young men I know that are still trying to free themselves from what I'd like to call the "color-coded" system of stereotypes. Most of our boys and men are more than just jail-birds and gangstas... it's just something they have to believe and find within themselves! ;) )
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