Beauty & the Geek... Teannas & Jacocby
daytonaraceway:
Quote from: BCJHCheerPower;729745
It better.
I don't understand what you mean? Could you please explain.
I'll have chapter 5 up later tonight.
Sam the T-man:
She means the chapter had better be up in a few days ;)
I'm not gonna comment right now 'cause I've seen it before in the contest, but looking forward to what comes next :)
daytonaraceway:
Chapter 5
"NO!"
"No? What?"
"I said no! I know that the only reason you're asking is because I'm pregnant."
"No, I love you I want to be with you."
"I don't care, I won't marry you unless you can prove that it's me and not the baby then I'll say yes."
"What do I have to do to prove I want to marry you or you?"
"I don't know you figure it out. I'm going to bed."
Teannas: That night I dreamt that Jacoby walked out and never looked back. I woke up in a cold sweat. That morning the movers came and took all the stuff out of the house. My Mom called to let me know that our clothes had been taken to the country house for a few weeks. My house wasn't ready quite yet. I didn't get it but ok whatever. Jacoby came down and we took one last look around.
"Are you gonna miss it?
Jacoby made me jump when he spoke. I looked at him,
he put his hand to my cheek, "Hell no! I want to go home" he kissed me then,
"I'm gonna spend my life with you, and I'll do whatever it takes to make you see that."
I jumped in his arms "Let's get out of here."
vita4all:
Daytona,
I took a break from my own stuff and just read through this. You have wonderful one-liners that had me cracking up laughing. What a funny story! I liked that you developed the part about the winnings for the auction being for disadvataged kids, too. Your creative style, character development and plot were tight, blended with well with comedy, and you gave Teannas enough heart and sweetness to be likable. I even got soft when she talked to her unborn baby, telling it mommy loves you. Loved the whole thing. Hope to see much more of your work in the future.
The only thing I'd suggest is that if this becomes or is already a passion for you, an investment or talking someone into buying you Adobe Photoshop or similiar software program would be worth it. I didn't catch on to the value of it myself until two or three months ago, and love it.
Take care and good luck, Vita
rebelmozzerella:
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I don't understand what you mean? Could you please explain.
You put the chapter should be up later today. I reply that it better. Do you get it now??
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