Fairy Months Of The Year Updated 9/13
Hidden~Secret:
Jade used to be a midwife and had been almost killed ten times by the same person who wanted her on his wall...as a trophy or maybe a trophy wife.She was lonely and unhappy until she met John and married him.
John was a lonely man who knew of his powers and after his family banned him from their home since he was different.He soon met Jade and found a new hope in life and a better reason to live.
vickylougrl:
cool shining would have liked more LOL! Can I make a suggestion? How about putting your couple in a rustic setting? Since they are fantasy beings? I dunno maybe a rustic old fashioned cabin. There are some really cool ones around available for download it would add feeling to the story I think but its a good start.
Hidden~Secret:
oh cool can you recomend some that would go?Oh and I don't want to spoil anything but she gives birth in a forest of trees,rivers and flowers
vickylougrl:
How about an elven home? Do a search on the exchange I know I saw some there.
Sam the T-man:
Not bad, but if I'm honest it seems lacking on the story part especially. The concept's good, but there's no feeling - language is the writer's paint (read that in tips somewhere :)); there may be pictures but you still need to be more descriptive. There's also not much character development going on - why should we care about the characters? What makes them special? What background history do they have? You've posted about the latter I know, but we need to know more - where are they from? Why are they in the situation they're in now? Who are these gods and why would their children be in danger? In doing this keep going back to why we should care - that's a crucial part of capturing the reader's interest and pulling them into the story. You can do a search on Google for creative writing tips, also there's threads here you can look through.
Also, if this is meant to be a fantasy story, you'll need to make us believe that. Not only the rustic buildings, but you need to work on the clothes. There's lots of sites out there that offer fantasy style clothes (although it doesn't seem that way (experience talking)). If you're using desert terrain, install this to get rid of the modern asphalt roads, look around on MTS2 for invisible recolours of the dustbin and mailbox. Search for appliances etc. that would look the part. Also, check the thread here on contest central about taking pictures, there's loads of tips available (I notice there's a wall down on one pic, for instance, watch out for that).
There's a lot there I know, but just trying to help as a fellow writer (as well as someone else who feels disheartened through lack of replies). I'm still learning too ;)
Navigation
[0] Message Index
[#] Next page
[*] Previous page