Xenophobia: Pride & Prejudice - Chapter Twenty-four
Sam the T-man:
First of all, thank you all so much for your comments and continued support; it's greatly appreciated :)
I have an important question however, and it's to do with an announcement on SimTales, a sim writing community that I've joined as a writer.
The R version of my latest chapter was too much for that site, despite it allowing adult stories. I compensated by using this version for the troublesome scenes there and keeping the original for a novel - it was suggested that I could get this published as a real book if I change the names accordingly.
However, I'm still - even more so now - wary about the version I've posted here. No one's said it's too much for this site, but I've experienced proof now that that doesn't necessarily mean anything. The trouble is, if I edit it too much it could detract from the story, as in leaving out important details. The scene with Mike I could get away with, but this last one with Johnny is foreshadowing what Ripp is about to tell him, so I can't tweak it too much for that reason.
So I need an honest opinion from you guys - is it too much for this site? If so I'll need to pull this story from here and continue it on SimTales - unless anyone has ideas on how to tone it down without leaving out the important bits.
I really need your help here folks, don't wanna get into trouble :? Thanks in advance.
Glamily:
i luv it! I don't think its to rude or anything.. damn mike and buzz! How could they hurt ripp! hes soo cute! I've just got defaults for aliens so my aliens rock!
steelguy:
Well, I admit I was wondering about that a bit myself. I mean, I don't think anyone has complained so far, but there were some very detailed descriptions in it that might push the boundaries a bit. Have you heard at all from the moderators here?
I think the scenes could be handled with less details if you needed to. Many writers can handle a 'sex scene' with vague innuendo and delicate references. You don't have to know exactly what the characters are doing for people to understand Ripps reaction, so it could be done. But it is your story, and you're telling it your way.
I mean, it made me squirm a little, but that's just me. :)
Sam the T-man:
I haven't, that's why I'm asking. That first scene with Mike gets quite a bit more detailed in the adult version and was completely cut here, as another attempt to tone it down was still a bit much. But I'm getting different opinions already, so I'll hold judgment for now - I think I need to ask a mod :?
mattitje:
I dun have probs with this chapter sadie ^^. Its not cause u put some pictures of sims without any clothes on but dun see any private parts on a non-adult site u should ask urself if its ok. The private parts are always coverd, and for the 2 or 3 pics wich has some "nudity" in it, it realy ain't much o.0 If it was up to me Sadie I would tell u don't worry about this and write ur next chapter :P
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