Fighting Comfort
Theraven:
just a little friendly advice with the pictures - put the walls up when photoshooting, because it will look a lot better if you don't see everything in the background too. Also, it makes the pictures a bit more realistic - especially when the characters are inside a house. Also, try to avoid speech bubbles and such (the codes showheadlines off and plumbbobtoggle are very good storytelling helpers :)). Zooming in on faces so that you see them clearly is a god idea too. And you can also change the graphic settings so that the picture quality goes up a few steps (but just remember that the more picture quality, the slower computer/game you will get, but a little of it doesn't hurt :). I've got everything on high, and my game is very slow - but I've got a slow PC and all the EP's installed, so that might be it, too...).
and like skori says - it does seem a bit more like paragraphs than chapters. But it's a nice plot :)
arielle22:
Thank you skori and theraven for the tips i'll work on it and make the chapters more like chapters
arielle22:
The last thing I wanted to do was tell my parents.I knew they wouldn't approve.I mean come on they didn't even approve of me having a boyfriend let alone me being pregnant.And the worst part-with TWINS!!!!But I knew it had to be done and went to their house.
(Gosh I forgot how ugly the living room was)
I walked in and sat down.They were both surprised to see me.I went to sit down on one of the recliners but decided to stay standing.
"Why don't you have a seat Amy.",Dad said.
"No Thanks."
"So what brings you here?", Mom asked
"I have to tell you guys something important and please try to be understanding."I said my voice shaking.
"Whats wrong Ames? You know you can tell us anything."(Ames was what my dad called me when he was worried)
I sat next to them on the couch.
"Well I haven't been completely honest with you guys in the past couple of months."
"It's ok Amy."Mom said. I guess she could hear the worried tone in my voice.
"The truth is, Ryan moved in with me the day after I got the house."I could see Mom's face turning red.But before she had a chance to speak I started talking again."And now I'm pregnant.""With Twins."
They both jumped up off the couch and started yelling.And when I tried to explain Mom just covered her ears. She made me feel like I was four.
"Amy Jones!""How could you let this happen!"
Mom was screaming at the top of her lungs and Dad was speechless.
"Well your not going through with this are you?" Mom asked trying to calm down.
"Well I'm not getting an abortion and me and Ryan can take care of children."
"I knew that Ryan kid was trouble the moment I saw him"Dad always tried to be right but this time he wasn't.
"Ryan is not trouble and we love each other.And hes giving me more support than you guys ever will."
"Well your not allowed back in this house until you are done with that boy"Dad screamed.I could see Mom nodding her head in agreement.
"Then I never coming back" I responded and ran out the door.
Mom chased after me,crying and Dad was chasing after her.
It was raing hard but I didnt stop running until I was home. I knew I couldn't turn back.
When I got home Ryan was there to comfort me.I knew he'd be there for me and always would be.
arielle22:
Ryan and I knew we needed a bigger house.So Ryan found a better job and we sold our house.Since we didn't have a place to live I started looking for a place where pregnant teenagers can stay for free.I found one near me called Riverblossom Hills Maternity Clinic.It was brand new and had just opened.It wasn't very big but it was nice.Nobody had come there yet so they let Ryan stay in one of the two rooms.It wasn't theideal living space but it would have to do until we found a new house.
Ryan was taking advanced classes in school in order to graduate before the babies were born so most days while he was at school I sat in my room thinking and watching my stomach grow.
When Ryan was home he liked to talk to the babies.They probably couldn't hear him but it was so sweet.He hating leaving me to go to school so I waited at the bus stop to tell him goodbye.I thought it might make him feel better
One day while Ryan was at school I felt a sharp pain in my stomach and went into labor.Everything else was ablur I heard a doctor say two boys but I only heard one baby crying.The doctor said one wasn't breathing and whisked them both away before I could get a glimpse of either of them.
They were two months premature and now I didn't know if they were both alive.I was worried sick and started sobbing. I was in to much pain to even get up and the three doctors the clinic had were all in the ICU taking care of my babies......or baby.
L0w3rfr3ak:
It's okay...that last picture is really burry. lol. And try putting the walls up.
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