wow, this has really picked up since last i checked, awesome updates

lol. these guys are awesome. and yay for updates. sorry about ur computer like dieing though.... but this i'm afraid is the fate of all us downloadaholics.... for some of us it just takes longer than others. i say as a struggle to keep my downloading under control and my download organized. though i will agree, no/less CC does lead to faster game, which is nice.

and i have to agree that BV is about useless, though if memory serves from years adn years ago, the vaca pack for sims1 kinda well sucked too, but that was so long ago, I don't remember. BV does have a good object or three, and the kimono's are kinda cute.... the walk to lot is ok... yeah that's about all I got for good things about it.

shesh i just realized i never said anything after reading the last chapter.... oops.

but yeah, still awesome as always. And can't wait for the next one. I think i really like the whole johny powers thing, but i'm a sucker for scifi and fantasy so go figure.

ok, completely loved it up until the 'it was all a dream' part. however i think i will blame that on ur computer not u.

though i understand, redoing all that would take a lot of time..... well, depending on how you go about it but it still would be a pain. though i'm just wondering about what would have happened to the pleasant family after the time skip, because they're all completely left out.... was Lilith still going to be with Alex? May-Sue still out of her mind? Angela...... well, yeah. Sorry they're my fav family from pleasantview (ok, mostly just Lilith, but i'm still curious as to basically what was going to happen)

though it is nice that u did technically finish it (ie post all the wedding pic.s and such) instead of just saying computer died, no more story. cuz that really would have been the lazy lazy way to end it, just call it over.

oh and will totally have to read it if u ever doing anything like this ever again

wow...... so he's going to let her mom die or something? because i mean usually someone who just gets weaker and weaker, well, yeah. anyway, awesome update! can't wait to see what happens next

Yeah I'll have to agree that it needs double quote marks, like it in books and stuff. Also, going to a new line/paragraph when switching from one person talking to another person talking.

Also, you need to decide which person to write in. that probably doesn't make much sense....
you should decide if the story is going to be told from a single character's point of view (always using me, I, and we when referring to themselves in the story) which is called first person POV (means Point Of View), or what's called 3rd person POV which means all characters are referred to by name, he, she, they, etc. The exception to both of those is in speech (that parts that should be in double quotes).

that sounds a little confusing.... I'll try an example....

1st person:
I was mad at Bob. He had late me waiting at the train stop for 3 hours. When he finally pulled up, I was ready to exploded.
"Where the heck have you been? You said you would be here forever-ago! I can't wait around on you all day!" I yelled before he had the chance to get out of his truck.
He got out and yelled back at me, "It's none of your business where I've been! Now get in or I'm leavin' you here! It's up to you Jane!"
(end example)

3rd person:
Jane was annoyed at Bob when he finally pulled into the parking lot of the train station, just over three hours late.
"Where the heck have you been? You said you would be here forever-ago! I can't wait around on you all day!" She yelled when he turned off the engine.
Once Bob was out of his car, he yelled back at her, "It's none of your business where I've been! Now get in or I'm leavin' you here! It's up to you Jane!"
(end example)

maybe it's just because not everything is in double quote to show when it's someone talking or not, but you seem to switch between 1st and 3rd and who is the 'I' in 1st person. (Basically that's a I could be wrong)

It is true that some stories use more than one person for the 'I' in 1st person; however, they typically only switch which character it is between chapters. Sometimes because they have lots of characters that are really far apart and don't know what the other is doing for say. Sometimes it's just to give different characters thoughts about different parts of the story. However, going back in the story just to give someone's POV can easily be very boring to reader and is very hard to do (you can do it, but I recommend against it).

You seem to be using James to tell the story a lot, but you also use 3rd person some and used 'We' and 'I' before making it clear which character's POV you were using.

Oh and just some little things that are probably just typo's: always cap the first letter that starts a new sentence that a character is speaking, and put the punctuation inside the quotes. Examples:
you used: "Do you think it worked" I asked her?
better: "Do you think it worked?" I asked.
you used: So I asked "should we have a baby?"  Jinger was shocked.
better: So I asked, "Should we have a baby?"
Jinger was shocked.


but yeah.... I'm not sure what I think of it yet, because I don't much about your story yet. So I guess we'll see as you update. I hope all the stuff about corrections doesn't discourage you or anything.... Just few little things here and there will make it clearer for people who try to read your story, which will help them better understand your story, and the more people who read and understand it, then more people have a chance of liking it. (basically I'm trying to be nice/helpful and I hope I don't come across as being mean)

oh it won't hurt him to interact with the kids anyway, it's good for them to see their dad taking care of them and such. Especially if any are boys. Maybe I'm just weird, but I think it doesn't hurt a guy/dad to be 'mr. mom' even if just for a little while.

and yay story.... *is still on the bookcase in the corner waiting for an update*

yeah... i don't think anyone likes spoilers..... wish i could help on the pictures or something, but u probably know like ten tons more about that than I do.... still, best of luck and may a muse fall into ur lap or inspiration whack you in the face, whichever u prefer.

yeah it is funny, guess we'll see how it goes, cuz it looks like it's getting crazy. Almost makes me wanna try it, but i don't know.... I'm already in the middle of the like 3 challenges..... but yeah. ever played the Asylum Challenge? it's kinda reminding me of that.

oh and the house is pretty-ful i like it.

lol, who knows..... i gotta say, sometimes I just like to complain, worse off or not. I guess Sadie knows if she's thought about it, but yeah.

wow, talk about happy fun times... and by that i mean a family out of control. So has her mom just snapped under the pressure or is there osmething else going on? oh well, i guess we wait for another update to see. well, i liked it and can't wait for the next update

"Will Luc survive to see the birth of his second child?", lol. If she kills him, I want pictures. but yeah, nice update 

well, i think i like it, at least so far. I guess u can mark me down as keeping an eye out for updates.

True, getting rid of a sim is easy..... and if it's nothing but prefect happy land, everything gets so boring SO quickly. chaos keeps everything fun.

ok. my memory is like the most unreliable thing you will ever find, so I wouldn't really worry about it. Now I'm wondering about what type of stuff Buck will have deal with, if it's more than what's already happened. but still wanna see things about everyone else *can't wait for next chapter *