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Ok so here's my latest story called Unseen! If my story has spelling or grammar mistakes I would appreciate it if you could tell me, thanks! :D
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Every child is special in there own way, right? Some can read well, others gifted at Maths, some brillant at Litracy and others Science. Yet I'm not good at any of that. In fact, my 'special' talent is probably the most werid that you've ever heard of...

My name is Pandora Strings. I'm sixteen years old, and I live in Grange Springs.


Ever since I was five, I could see dead people, spirts, ghosts... whatever you want to call them.  At that age, I thought every child could see their dead Grandmother. At that age, I thought it was perfectly normal to see my dead dog running around the garden.
But now, as I'm much older, I've come to learn that that,  it isn't OK to see dead people roaming the Earth. Infact, it makes me a freak.
My mother can't see ghosts, but I have a strange feeling my father somehow could. I don't know who he is, because he died when I was only a few weeks old.
No-body believes me that I can see the dead. I mean, who would? Ex-boyfriends have laughed in my face. Ex-Best Friends have spred the word around the school so people gave me funny looks and laughed at me. Yet, saying that, only two people believe me. One is a fifteen-year-old girl called Anrella Fall.

I've known Anrella since we were just little girls, and she believes anything. When I first told her that I could see the dead she was amazed, but then shook her head and said I was pulling her leg until I said the ghost of her Grandad knew where her other favourite high-heeled shoe had got too. When she looked behind the the bed (where I told her to look) she believed me, alright.
And the second person to believe me is sixteen-year-old Garry Maloure.

I met Garry by accident when I dropped my school books to his toes and since then we've been friends. I told him how I could see ghosts and somehow, he believed me. I asked him why and he said, "Thats the only explaination on why you were talking to yourself a few days ago."

I thought that the only thing I could do was see them.
But I was so wrong.

It's only on chapter 1 and I love it already! It's awesome! *hugglez Alice*

Awww thank you! *Blushes* Chapter 2 is coming up tomorrow :)

yay! i cant wait! it awesome! xD i love Pandora and Gary!

Lol me too :D

HURRY UP WITH CHAPTER 2!!!!!

this is awesome so far! lol i know its just the first chapter but u got me hooked already!

I promise chapter 2 will be up soon but I won't be on for a while because I'm ill :(

Here is Chapter Two of Unseen! :) I hope you enjoy it!
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"Anrella, are you sure?" I asked my best friend as we reached Dr. Kelly's room. "Are you sure your arm's OK?"
"Of course I am, Pan!" Anrella grinned as me as she turned to the door. "Just wait for me in the waiting room, OK?"


Anrella was going to the hospital for a cheak up on her arm which she'd badly cut. She wanted to get it out of the dressing today for Garry's Halloween party. And it was the middle of summer! He told us the party was now because he was going on holiday at Halloween, so he wanted to do it now. Trust Garry.

"OK, well if your sure." I smiled at Anrella and watched her open the door before I headed off to the waiting room.
I sat down to a sad looking man and looked out of the window, waiting for Anrella.
"Errr...nice day, isn't it?" The man slowly asked me. I turned my head to smile at him before gasping in horror... a pale woman in a hospital gown was standing beside him!

"Errrrrr....errrrr....y-y-yeahhh..." I gabbled, staring at the woman. Was she a ghost?
"He needs to know." The woman murmmered. "He needs to know." She pointed to the man and I suddenly got up and ran out the room. I wasn't going to be in the same room as a ghost! As I exited the waiting room, the woman suddenly reappered infront of me!
"What do you want?" I asked, taking a step back. I was a little scared of ghosts. I didn't know what they could do to humans...

"He needs to know." The woman repeated. "He needs to know. He needs to know."
"Who? Why are you here?" I yelled as she raised her head.
"There coming!" The woman gasped before fading away.
I suddered and turned around to see Anrella walking towards me.
"Hey." She grinned. "Wassup?"
"N-n-nothing." I stammered, grabbing her arm. "Let's get out of here and go to Garry's party!"

******************Later on....********************
Anrella and I walked up to Garry's back gate. She was dressed as some princess with a tiara and I had dressed up as a gothic Alice-in-Wonderland. Garry had spotted us and walked up to us, grinning.

"Hi." He waved at us. "Nice costumes."
"Thanks." I smiled before looking at Garry's costume, which was a vampire. "Yours is cool."
"Why are we talking?" Anrella moaned. "Less talking more partying!"
Garry and I laughed before heading off towards the band with Anrella.
Garry's band for his party was his own which he formed with his guy-friends, Mitch, Harvey and Tom. Garry was the lead singer, of course. They had decided to play and opening song for the other guests to come in to.

It was awesome! Anrella and I began our favourite dance while two other girls just did whatever they wanted.
"Can't believe that girl's a princess too." Anrella muttered to me, pointing to a girl in a pink princess costume. I laughed and turned around to get some punch before gasping in utter horror...the ghost woman had followed me from the hospital!

"He needs to know!" The ghost screamed, glaring at me.
I screamed and fell backwards, hitting my head on a rock. My head began to throb and I felt sick. The screams of other guests filled my ears, Garry yelling, “Someone phone an ambulance!” hurting my eardrums… and then I blacked out.

This is pretty good!

Thanks! :)

i luv this story! its awesome.. just one question.. do u know where you got that gothic alice-in-wonderland costume? cause its really awesome :D

omg! i cant wait for the next...again!! This is so good! keep up the good work! xD

I can't wait for chapter 3! Glad you feel better, Alice. ^.^

ooh more and more gripping!

omg i love this story. great job cant wait for more!

Aww thank you everyone! *hugglez Skori, hiiammregg, emoscenesk8r, .meaghan. and rosegurl123* Oh yes, rosegurl123, I got the costume from the Sims2.com. :)

koolies.. u do know where abouts??

In the sim section, if you type in 'Wonderland' you'll find several sim's including the one wearing that costume :)

Cool story! I can't wait to read more! =)

I r like this~ I r bookmark your story~ :3

Great story, I love the idea of her being able to see ghosts (and the clothes your sims are dressed in).

Thanks everyone! Chapter 3 will hopefully be up tonight!

When are you uploading chapter 3?!! not to pressure you much but....HURRY!! xD

Dont worry, all I need to do is take a few more pics and then it will be up! :)

Hey everyone! Here's Chapter Three of Unseen, I hope you like it! :)
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I groaned and opened my eyes to see the smiling face of my mom, Lynnie.
"Hey, hun." She smiled softly at me, putting the magazine she'd been reading a table.
"M...Mom?" I asked slowly, rubbing my eyes. "M...Mom?"
"Yeah, it's me, honey." My mother smiled and walked over to me, putting a hand on my head.
"Mom...my head hurts..." I moaned, rubbing my head. The world seemed a blur of diffrent colours as I tried to keep my eyes open.
"And it should be, you had a nasty fall." Mom sais, touching my cheek.
"Mom...wh-what happened?" I asked, looking around.
"You screamed and blacked out a Garry's party." She smiled again, stroking my hair. "Everythings going to be OK."
My mother walked out of the room and I could hear her taking to a Doctor before walking off with them.
"He needs to know..." The  ghost woman's voice whispered in my head. "He needs to know..."
"Shut up!" I shrieked, looking around the room before spotting her standing next to my wardrobe. I stood up and stormed wobbily up to her.



"What is your problem?!" I yelled angrily. "I don't know what you want!"
The ghost frowned at me. Scowling at me.
"Why are you scaring me?" I asked, frowing back. "Why?!"
"I'm sorry." The ghost whispered, looking a me. "I'm sorry."
I was so shocked I took a step back, blinking like an owl. "Uhh...it's Ok...." I  gabbled.
"I husband...he needs to know how I died." The ghost woman explained, looking around. "He blames himself."
"What happened?" I asked, watching her with wide eyes. "Tell me."
"I was pregnant." The ghost said softly, looking at me. "My husband and I were at a baseball game. I wanted to go home, but he shouted at me that I had to stay with him. I blacked out and was rushed to hospital, only die in the process of giving birth. The doctors told my husband if we hadn't of been at the baseball game, they could of got to the hospital in time, saving me."
"I'm so sorry." I gasped. "I never realised how tragic your life must of been."
"It is quite alright." The ghost woman smiled at me. "I'm Christina Long, by the way. Please help my husband."
"Pandora." I nodded. "Right, I'll help him."
Christina showed me where her husband was and I started to talk to him, hoping he would understand.



"Err...Mr Long?" I asked, looking at the man. "Mr Long?"
"Yes?" The man said slowly, looking up at me. "What do you want?"
"Your...your wife....Ch-Christina..." I began, only to be interupted by him.
"My wife? Did you know her? Who are you?" The man asked quickly, his eyes wide.
"Thats a long story." I said laughing slightly. "Your wife, er...she's here with us."
There was a long pause before Mr Long glared at me and got up.
"Making fake stories about my wife, how dare you!" He snapped, getting up and beginning to walk off.
"Tell him the time he bought me three white roses when we were sixteen." Christina whispered to me. "Tell him."
"She says, to you remember the time you bought her three white roses when you were sixteen?!" I called after Mr Long.
He stopped before turning around, gawping at me. "How did you know that?" He asked, amazed, walking towards me.
"I told you, your wife is here with us." Isaid, smiling at him.
The man paused for a moment before looking around. "Christina, if you can here me...I'm sorry. I shouldn't of dragged you to that baseball game...I'm sorry." He said, looking at the floor, tears pricking in  his eyes.
"Tell him, it was never his fault and I will always love him." Christina said, smiling sadly at her husband.
"She says that it was never your fault and she will always love you." I whispered, patting him on the back.
" I know...I...love you." The man said softly, wiping his eyes.
"Tell him not to blame himself." Christina said, watching her husband.
"She says, don't blame yourself." I whispered, patting the man's shoulder.
"I will...I promise, Christina."  He smiled sadly, rubbing his eyes.



Christina gentally moved forward and kissed his cheek. "I know you will." She breathed before looking up to see a bright, glowing light. "What is that?"
"It's heaven." I whispered, watching her. "It means your ready to go."
Christina gave me one last smile. "Thank you." She whispered before taking a step into the light and dissapering.
The, as the man sat down, I looked up to see my mom and Anrella's bother Roberto walking up the corridor.
"Damn!" I hissed before rushing into my room before tying my hair into two ponytails, throwing some clothes over the top of my hospital gown and jumping onto my bed.



"Your...dressed." My mom gasped, staring at me.
"Yeah, I'm bright eyed and bushy tailed!" I grinned before looking at Roberto as he smiled at me.
"Ahh, Pandora, I'm glad to see your alright." He said as I got up and walked over to him.
"Yeah, thanks." I smiled before he leaned forward and gave me a hug.
"You had a bad fall." Roberto whispered, kissing my neck. "I'm glad your alright."
I sighed, yet just as I was about to speak, I noticed a girl glaring at me, cuts on her face.



"HE'S MINE!" She screamed before fading, leaving me gawping like a goldfish.
"Pandora? Pandora?" Roberto whispered in my ear "Are you OK?"
"Yeah..." I whispered quickly, although I wasn't. Somehow, I knew my days of crossing ghosts over to the other side wasn't over just yet!

omg i love this story...it has me on the edge of my seat i love ghost stories!!

Hmm... Jealous (now dead) ex-girlfriend who can't seem to let him go?

This reminds me of a series I was reading not too long ago where the girl can see and speak to ghosts and in the first book she has to confront a girl who killed herself after her boyfriend broke up with her and now wants to be alive again and to have her ex-boyfriend back...

Anywayy, I love the latest update. :D

Thanks guys! :D

Music_Is_My_Life: Your close! she isn't his ex-girlfriend but your very close! :) All will be revealed in the next chapter!

If she wasn't his ex. . . was she his stalker?

*sits down and waits for the next chappie*

Skori, you may be right... :D
Next chapter up soon, I promise!

She had a crush on him and he kept pushing her away

WAIT!
She was his girlfriend but died and now won't let anyone else near him.

OMG i LOVVEEEE IT!!!!! iTS SOOO GOOD! CANT WAIT FOR MORE!!!!!!! yOUR THE BEST PUNKROCKER! xDDD

Hehe! Hopefully I'll get the next chappie up soon! I just need a few more pictures!

Ooh, it's really good so far. I love stories like this. I bet the girl was someone who loved him, but he didn't love her, and now she's all jealous and stuff. You did ask for us to point out spelling and grammar mistakes, so you should know that in Chapter Two, in the third paragraph, you typed 'your' when it should be 'you're.' Other than that I didn't notice any mistakes. Nice job, Alice! :)

PLEASE POST NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!! please!!!!! *does puppy eyes* im dying here!