Oh my god that slob! I am going to go on my sims and kill Dustin!
I hate dustin now. Poor Lilith.

So, post! Post, cluedo, post! I can't wait to get into this mystery!(hopefully I'll win this time, hehe)

Guys, cut the talk of elves and update! lol

Say, Ari, I didn't recognise you with your new avvie for a bit! I like it though!

Ooh. update quick.

Awwww. I don't mind mushy stuff. Well I do, but in this chap it was perfectly balanced.

I love it. You got on my favourite list. Congrats.
Good writing, beautiful images... *claps* and it's funny!
btw:  Kit Simmons is so pretty! That must mean you are too lol.
Update soon!

I love it. You got on my favourite list. Congrats.
Good writing, beautiful images... *claps* and it's funny!
btw:  Kit Simmons is so pretty! That must mean you are too lol.
Update soon!

Cap. Brown, with the firepoker in the ballroom.

hAHAHA! I love Astral! (both ones, lol)  She's hilarious. Just standing there, looking while they have sex! That was so funny!

This sounds like fun, Astral!! Update soon!

Yes. The images are brilliant!

What I meant was this doesn't seem like a story at all. How are you going to make work on it??

Good luck.

Captain Brown with the lead pipe in the lounge.

You are making a few grammar mistakes that make it harder to read.

One thing: you keep switching between past and present tense. Keep to one or the other.
Another thing, the phonecall for example.
"How do you mean, she disappears?"
This does not make sense.
"What do you mean, she's disappeared?" would be better.

Put your chapters together on the same topic, it saves space.

Anyway, to counteract my long ramblings I would like to say this is really interesting and realistic. The plot is really interesting, especially the Tonia disappearing twist.
And your sims are gorgeous!! Where did you get her hair?

Oh my god that thief is so cute.

Update.

It's a bit confusing, you could make a good story out of it however.