Test Reader Needed: Plot idea for 'Suddenly Simmerised' Legacy

[discowhipped]

Hey. I am planning to update The Simons Legacy, but I'm feeling uncertain about the direction the story is taking. I need a second opinion. Or maybe more. I need advice without spoiling the story for other readers, because I think the idea is going to be quite pivotal to the entire story (even though it is a legacy). So: if anyone wants to help please post here and I will PM you, or PM me if you want.
There's a nice big plate of brownies and shiny story spoilers in it for you! 

[Stelio Kontos]

I'll do it.

[discowhipped]

Hey I tried sending you a PM, but your inbox is full. Before I send it, do you want pics or no pics? It's readable without pics but not as shiny.
TIA.

[Stelio Kontos]

Hey I tried sending you a PM, but your inbox is full. Before I send it, do you want pics or no pics? It's readable without pics but not as shiny.
TIA.

Sorry about the full inbox. (190% filled after purging.)
I need most of them for correspondence for my story that has effectively become my personal Chinese Democracy.

Anyway, might as well send me by e-mail what you've got going on so far.
Here's my e-mail address:
ricosuave42@myway.com

[Zorom]

Darn! I was too late. I'm such a fan of your story, it's hilarious!
Can I read your story too? I always reread my brother's stories and advise him on them, I consider myself something of n expert, lol. Well, not really. But ANYWAY.

You said you needed a second opinion or "maybe more"! Please can I help?

[discowhipped]

Sorry I haven't gotten around to it yet - New Year and stuff. That's my excuse anyway! Well, I was on holiday.

Zorom, I am flattered! Of course you can advise me. The more, the better. I still haven't sent it yet - still compiling notes and stuff. If you want to PM me your email or whatever I can send to both of you via attachment.

I have this whole week free, hopefully, so it should be sent by then!

-EDIT-
I've sent it to both of you. Thanks for helping.