The Great Journey Chapter 5 started

[Sierra117]

This story is about a family on the run from the law. It is called the great journey, because its about a teenager who finds a way of trying to prove their family is not responsible for the killing of a VIP.

For almost 18 years now, me and my family have been on the run from the law trying to mantain secrecy from the law. My mother Nancy, my father Mark, and my grown up brother, Victor, have been jumping from one place to another, trying to stay hidden. Though this is all behind us now we still are haunted by it. We were blamed for a lie of the killing of a VIP, but we had to move and stay together. But my mom and dad, exposed us, and sent me through what I call, the great journey. My name is Brittany Anderson also.

[Stelio Kontos]

A pretty good concept.
A 8.5/10. One meaningless gramatical error detracted from the score, but I have a tendency to be nitpicky about that.

[Sierra117]

Chapter 1: The Secret

It was just simply another day, though little did I know this would be the day I found out about what my parents hid through me for almost 2 decades. I woke up and the sun was shining on me. I cleared my eyes and got dressed. I walked downstairs and mom was watching tv while dad was cooking breakfast.



"What are you cooking dad?" I asked.
"Your favorite" he said.
"Yeah!" I said.



Soon mom came out and grabed a plate. The same for me and dad. After we sat down and started eating, I mention something that made them feel I was getting suspicious about what they were hiding from me.
"Hey dad, mom"
"Yeah dear?" mom responded.
"Well, for the past 15 years, we've been moving from one location from the other" "and well, I don't really know why. I haven't asked it before, so I finally remembered today"
"Thats really complicated," said dad.
"Its a very long story and" dad cut himself off.
"Like what?" I responded.
"Oh look!" "Time for school!" mom said.
"Goodbye Brittany" mom and dad said.



"Look we need to talk," mom said.
"About what dad said" dad said.
"What you almost spat out!" mom shouted
"Yes I know," dad replied.
"Look, I know we have to contiune keeping this a secret between you me and Victor, but this is very cruel" mom said.
"I know" dad replied.
"If we ever tell her, she would hate us for a lifetime" dad said.
"But we have to" mom said softly.
"Telling her is not the only way" dad said.
"Then what else?" mom shouted.
"By turning ourselves in" dad said.
"What!?! We can't leave her!" mom yelled.
"We have to," dad replied.
"They don't know we have kids, and thats why it will be just you and me" dad said.
"When?" mom said.
"Tonight, when she goes to sleep" dad said softly.
"Okay" mom said.



Soon I arrived home from school, feeling nothing was wrong.
"Hi dear" mom said.
"Hi" I responded as I was walking into the dining room.
I sat my homework down and began to work on it.



When I finished, moms eyes began to tear up. I thought that she was having another one of those moments, so I went outside and got into the pool. I then went to sleep, still feeling nothing was wrong. Then mom and dad came in and said goodnight, little did I know, they were saying goodbye.



To be continued.....

[Stelio Kontos]

Still a good story.
Off-topic: Let me guess, you're like me and wait until at least Chapter 2 to introduce the main plotline for a story.

[Sierra117]

Chapter 2: The Surrender

"Shes asleep" mom said quietly to dad.
"Okay" dad replied.
Mom and dad soon quietly stepped out the door and into the dark.



The next morning, the 2 arrived at Philbrook Police Station.



That man right there, is police chief Sean Philbrook who dedicated the police station to his lastname.



The 2 then stepped in the lot and hugged each other and took a deep breathe.
"It's going to be okay" dad said.
Nancy tried to hold back her cry but she couldn't.
Nancy then hugged dad tightly and started for it.
"Exceuse me" said dad.
"Yes?" the guard said.
"I'd like to speak with the police cheif" said dad.
"Ah yes right down the door straight ahead" he said.



Mark and Nancy tried walking into the door but were stopped by a loud voice.
"Wait" the desk man said. "You have to sign in"
"Oh Okay" Mark walked up to the desk.
Mark then signed it.



"Leroy, will you take these 2 to the chief?" said the desk man.
"Sure" said the guard.



The 2 then walked behind the door to find another guard and another door.
"Right in here sir" said the man.



The 2 then nervousily steped in the office.
"Sir, we have 2 who would like to talk to you" said the man.
The Police Chief then started out with a question.



"So who are you 2?" said the police chief.
"Were Mr. and Mrs. Anderson" said Mark.
Then the police chief remained silent for a second.
"Mr. and Mrs. Anderson huh? Well we've been expected you" said the police chief.
"And you know what? We've been hunting you down for 18 and a half years" said the police chief.
"We know" said Nancy.
"So that puts you in jail" said the police chief.
"NO!" Mark yelled as the chief got up.
Mark got up and ran for the chief. But right when he got near him, he was pulled back by Leroy.



"PUT THE 2 IN THE CELLS NOW!" the chief demanded.
"Yes sir," said the guard.
Leroy walked them into their cells and threw them ruthlessly into their cells.



The chief walked up and looked at the 2. He had a mad face.
Though it was only the first day, the 2 were still feeling bad about doing that,
but it would have only been worse if they didn't do it.



To be contiuned.....

[Stelio Kontos]

Not exactly the best pictures, but the story helps carry the story higher. An 8/10.

[Sierra117]

Not exactly the best pictures, but the story helps carry the story from the pit of failure. A 7.5/10.

Notes for pic taking: At least put a tile roof on your buildings if you're gonna see the roof/ceiling in any of the pics.

So your saying im just making it worse? I have been working very hard on this, and I think its fine. I did put a roof since i hid because if it was visible, then you wouldn't be able to see the stuff inside.

[Stelio Kontos]

So your saying im just making it worse? I have been working very hard on this, and I think its fine. I did put a roof since i hid because if it was visible, then you wouldn't be able to see the stuff inside.

Sorry......................Thou art not psychic.
It's just a pet peeve of mine, seeing skylight in interior shots.
Ignore my last score. It's now an 8/10. At least keep the roof on during the interior shots.

[Sierra117]

After the event of Mark and Nancy, the police chief found out something even more devastating.

"Sir, I've looked through the Andersons records and it seems that they have 2 children, One a male named Victor and another named Brittany" said the desk man.
"Hmmm, so those little ones are out hiding somewhere?" said the police chief.
"Actually their grown up" the desk man said.
"Well that scores to many victories for the day" said the chief.
"And the SWAT teams are being deployed at their last known location."
"Should I alert the officers that are on guard?" the desk man replied.
"Yes, and put Leroy in charge of them" said the chief.
"Yes sir" replied the desk man.



Chapter 3: The good and the not so good

The cop car jerked to a stop and all the cops got out to meet a squad of SWAT team members about ready to storm the building.

"So uh heh when are we going to storm it?" replied a cop member.
"Well we need to send someone at the back and secure it so that we can storm it safely". said the SWAT Squad Leader.

It was now 3:00

"Men were about ready to storm it, everyone get prepared!" shouted the squad leader.
"Gaberial! go through that path in the hedges and secure the backside!" shouted Leroy.
"Steady!" the SWAT Leader yelled.
Gaberial than ran in the hedge path and secured it.
"Backside Secured!" she said.



"Okay everyone ready?" the SWAT Leader shouted.
"YEAH!!!" everyone shouted.



But that shout is what ruined the mission. Why? because I woke up from it, red and blue flashing against the house, and I ran to the guest room and found out that dad still didn't finish the back deck.



I thought for a second, should I take the risk of going down the ladder, or surrendering? Well I choose the ladder, and it worked.



I went down the ladder still dressed in my PJs, I slid down it, and then jumped off the deck and went to the hedges in the back. But then I heard a big loud "GO!" I ran behind the hedges and then banged into someone sending me to the ground. When I saw who it was I tried to run but was pulled back.



"Shhhh!" A voice said.
"Who are you?" I said.
"I'm Gaberial" she said.
"So your a cop trying to help me?" I replied.
"Yes and I know what this is all about".



Just then the cops burst into the side of the house and secured it.



"Its time to move they'll be comin out empty handed any moment."



After every SWAT and Police member was inside, me and Gaberial escaped.



"Nothing over here sir"
"Negative"
"Nohting was found" reported the SWAT member to the captain.

But then a SWAT member found out that there was a ladder leading from one of the bedrooms.
"Sir, in the second story we found a ladder leading down to ground level" reported a member.



To be contiuned.....

[Stelio Kontos]

Nice. Back up to the original 8.5/10 score.
And............SWAT team rules.

[Sierra117]

Chapter 4: A new hope

"So whats your name?" Gaberial asked.
"Brittany, Brittany Anderson" I said.
"Anderson? Oh man" she said.

Gaberial then change direction of which we were going in.

"What was that for?" I asked.
"I want you to meet someone" she said.

Soon we steped out of the car and showed up at a building.



2 men dressed in black uniforms stood at the front door



We both walked up to the door.

"Identifcation ma'am" the guard said.
"Gaberial Willington" she said.
"Welcome Gaberial" the guard replied.
"And who do we have here?" asked the other guard.
"Oh just a friend" Gaberial replied.

We both walked inside to find almost 15 more guards playing pool or poker and others on duty.

"Wait, men dressed in fancy outfits, wearing sunglasses with fancy hair styles, are you a member of the Calaviers?" I burst out.
"Well you've found out" Gaberial replied.
"But were friendly to you" she said.

I was shocked for a second. Soon we steped into a giant office.

"So whats in here?" I asked.
"You'll see" she replied.

"Ahh Gaberial welcome back" the man replied.
"Thank you" Gaberial said.
"And you are?" the man said.
"Oh I'm Brittany Anderson" I said.
"Brittany, I have something for you" he said.
"What? Something about what happened last night?" I said.
"Yes, and I will tell you" he said.
"Well 18 years ago, your parents were involved in a big conflict" "And not just big, a colossal incident. And that was because at that time, a man named Jason Clark, was shot and killed, and your parents were blamed sending you and them on the run for the past 2 decades" "And now they've went to prison, they left you and you fell for it. Thats what all this ruckus is about. Thats why were keeping you safe from authorites and all who are with them"



My eyes teared up when he said that they went to prision.

"No! No! they didn't. I know it! They didn't!" I shouted.
"Brittany, I've been watching you grow up into the beatiful little girl you are today, and I saw the whole event" he said.
"Brittany, he's right" Gaberial replied.
"And I have to go now, I have to contuine to make the cops believe I'm with them" Gaberial said.

"Brittany lets go play pool or something" the man replied.
"Okay" I said.

[Stelio Kontos]

Double-agents........I think? Sweet........

[Sierra117]

Chapter 5: If you want it done right...

Me and Leon went to play a game of pool. Of course, I knew why he wanted to. He wanted to show off his expert skills.



"Ach! You got me again!" I yelled.
Leon then laughed.

"Brittany, I need to have a word with you" Leon said.
"Come step into my office"
"Brittany, now that you know that your on the run and are actually not responsible for what happen 18 years ago but this is probably hard to prounce to you, but I need you to assassinate someone" he said.

I stood there, devastated.

Chapter 5: If you want it done right...

Me and Leon went to play a game of pool. Of course, I knew why he wanted to. He wanted to show off his expert skills.



"Ach! You got me again!" I yelled.
Leon then laughed.

"Brittany, I need to have a word with you" Leon said.
"Come step into my office"
"Brittany, now that you know that your on the run and are actually not responsible for what happen 18 years ago but this is probably hard to prounce to you, but I need you to assassinate someone" he said.

I stood there, devastated.

"So who?" I asked.
"My brother James" he said.
"Your brother? What did he do wrong?" I replied.
"He has been ticking me off lately and I figured I would give him a little taste" "But since he knows that I'm going to kill him, I need you since he won't have a clue of who you are"
"And why not anyone else?" I argued.
"Well hes been here dozens of times so he knows everyone here, except you." "So are you with me?" he said.
"Yes I am" I said.
"Great and if he asks where his checkbook tell him its right over there"



I arrived at a deserted building.

"Uhh this is the place?" I asked.
"Yeah, it's pretty pitifull after being abandoned years ago"
"Wheres the man?" I asked.



"Go inside and follow the hallway to the elevators" he said.



I stepped inside and almost plummeted.



I reached the top to find a man running around.



"Exeuse me ma'am" the man said.
"Who are you?" I answered.
"I am James" he said.
"Do you know Leon?" I asked.
"Why yes he is my brother now could you please help me find my checkbook" "I need to be at the bank before it closes"



"Oh over their" I pointed.
"Let me check"

I silently followed him and then stabbed him. I returned to the office to tell what had happened.

[Omega81]

Hey I love this story contuine on.

But why isn't anyone else posting? This story is cool

[Sierra117]

Hey I love this story contuine on.

But why isn't anyone else posting? This story is cool

I was about to ask the same thing. It makes me feel like i'm doing a bad job.