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« Reply #30 on: May 09, 2008, 04:41:57 pm »

Yup, next time I go on I'll check for you. =)
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« Reply #31 on: May 12, 2008, 04:23:24 pm »

Btw, your icon is HILARIOUS!
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« Reply #32 on: May 12, 2008, 05:49:43 pm »

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Btw, your icon is HILARIOUS!


Indeed, it is.
I found it on Photobucket a long while back,
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« Reply #33 on: July 06, 2008, 05:07:51 pm »

Hey guys! Been awhile, huh? I just finished Chapter 3, but unfortunately, don't have any pictures. I hope you'll still read it, though there aren't any pictures this time.

*WARNING* Be warned that the ending is a bit startling.
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To Be Alone- Chapter 3
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Liana always used this time to do her chores. She looked at her list to see what she was supposed to do next:
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Clean the kitchen. CHECK.  
Clean the dining room.          
Clean the living room.            
Clean the mudroom.              
Clean the twins' bedroom.    
Clean the bathroom's.            
Clean mom and dad's room.
Shovel the backyard.            
Shovel the driveway.            
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She frowned, the dining room was the worst chore she had. She had to clean the walls, clean the table, clean the chairs, clean the floor, wash off the twins' high chairs, and dust the chandelier.

"Well," she said, "better get started...". She grabbed the list, stuffed it into her pocket and sighed. She went to the cleaning closet, and grabbed a mop, sponge, duster, rag, and she got a bucket of water from the kitchen. She went to the dining room, and started...
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About 2 hours later, the dining room was done. She was panting because of the hard work.

 "Phew!" she said, "at least THAT'S done."

She leaned the tools against the closet door while she pulled the list out of her pocket, and read:
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Clean the kitchen. CHECK.  
Clean the dining room. CHECK.        
Clean the living room.            
Clean the mudroom.              
Clean the twins' bedroom.    
Clean the bathroom's.            
Clean mom and dad's room.
Shovel the backyard.            
Shovel the driveway.            
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She sighed again, "Well," she said, "I really shouldn't be surprised. I mean, they gave me less chores then usual. The 'list' usually says to just clean the entire house!"

She grabbed her 'tools', feeling a burst of strength pass through her. She was going to finish today, whether she wanted to or not.

She was in the middle of cleaning the living room when she heard the twins wake up and start to howl.

"Me want OUT!" Lana screamed. Liana quickly dropped the duster on the ground, and ran to their room. Liana went over to Lana's crib first, because she was the one who was wacking the side of the crib because she wanted to get out so badly. Liana pulled Lana out, and ran over to Lacey's crib and pulled her out. They both rubbed their eyes, but only Lana looked at Liana,

"Mworning" Lana said to her.

"Morning" Liana said, "did you guys both sleep well?".

"Well," started Lana, "I had a dweam about awl of us being pwincess's living in a bwig castle. And mommy and daddy were da King and Qween of da castle".

"Cool!" said Liana, "it sounds like you had a fun dream, what about you Lacey?". Lacey had her head stuck between Liana's arm and the side of her body. She was shivering, and Liana could hear some sniffles.

"Lacey?" Liana walked quickly to the dining room, put Lana in her high chair, and looked at Lacey curled up in her arms. Lacey finally looked up at her sister. Big fat tears were rolling down her face.

"Oh, Lacey!" Liana said, wiping her sister's tears, and hugging her, "It's ok! Tell me what happened, and maybe I can help". Lacey stopped crying, but her sniffling had yet to stop.

"It was HORRIBLE!" Lacey cried out, "Ow house was burning to da gwound! And we was all on fire!". Liana hugged her sister again,

"Oh, Lacey..." Liana started, "That wasn't a nice dream was it?".

"NO!" screamed Lacey, "I never wanna fawl asweep ever again!". Liana cradled her sister,

"I'm sorry Lacey. It must've been scary, but don't worry, it wasn't real, and it will never happen. Mommy and Daddy have a fire alarm in the house even IF it happens. So don't you worry, we're all fine, and we always will be."

Lacey burst into tears again, "It was STILL scary!"

Liana felt her sister's forehead, it was burning hot.

"Oh dear, Lacey! You're burning up! Back to bed with you!"

Lacey looked at her sister with tired eyes, red from crying.

"My eyes hurt, Wiana".

"Why don't you close them Lacey, they might feel better...". Liana answered

Lacey nodded, and closed her eyes. Liana carried her to the nursery, and put her in her crib, pulled the blanket up to her shoulders, and went to the bathroom to get the thermometer, and the Ibuprofen from the medicine cabinet. She walked back to her sisters' room, put the bottle of medicine in her pocket, and lifted her sister's back up, so she was sitting. She pushed several pillows behind Lacey, so she would be supported enough to sit up.

"Ok Lacey, open wide!"

Lacey looked at her sister, with half-open eyes, and opened her mouth halfway.

Liana put the thermometer in, and waiting about 2 minutes to pull it out.

"Well, looks like YOU wont be playing outside for a few days," Liana said to herself, "you've got a temperature of 101.3!"

Liana got a glass of water, and a measuring cup from the kitchen, and went back to the nursery.

When she got there, Lacey's head was hanging back, resting on the pillows. Liana pulled the medicine from her pocket, measured a teaspoon with the measuring cup, and lifted Lacey's head.

"Lacey," Liana said, "you have to have some medicine, ok? It'll make you feel better".

Lacey opened her eyes, and opened her mouth. Liana put the spoonful of medicine in Lacey's mouth, and gave her the cup of water right after she swallowed it painfully.

Lacey drank the water thirstily, and gave the cup back to Liana right after she finished drinking.

"My thwoat hurts!" Lacey said.

"Don't worry Lacey," Liana said, "the medicine will help".

Liana put the pillows back where they were, and helped Lacey pull the blankets around herself. Lacey fell asleep very quickly, so Liana thought perhaps she was also ill from staying up late during the freezing cold nights.

Lacey was the kind of person who didn't fall asleep right away. Unlike Lana, who fell asleep the minute she was in her crib, Lacey would just lay down, and wait in the dark for a long time, until she finally got too tired to stay awake.

After Liana was sure Lacey was fast asleep, she went back to the dining room, and picked up the now almost screaming Lana, who was furious that her twin was getting more attention than her.

"WHY DID LACEY GET TO GO TO BED EARWY??!!" Lana screamed.

"Because she's sick Lana," said Liana calmly, trying not to upset her sister any more than possible, "she has a fever".

Lana's twisted, red, scowling face suddenly turned pale, and worried.

"Is she going to be ok???" she asked fervently.

"Of course she is, Lana!" Liana replied fiercely, "It's just a fever. And I gave her medicine to make her feel better. She's asleep now, so we can't go in there. But you can watch TV if you want, and I can get you some toys and a teddy bear to play with".

Lana looked relieved that Liana said Lacey was fine, so she nodded her head with a smile on her face, "Yes! I wanna pway out here!" she said happily.

Liana smiled at her sister, and put her down on the floor in the living room. She turned the TV on, and put it on Noggin, the little kids channel. Then, she decided to finish her chores while the twins were both happy. She picked up the last few things in the living room, and then set off for the mudroom.

Liana was glad that Lana was occupied, so she could continue with her work. She grabbed her cleaning tools and started on the mudroom.

It took her about 2 hours to do the mudroom, and clean all the bathroom's. She stalled cleaning the twins bedroom because she didn't want to risk waking Lacey up. She was making her parents' bed when she randomly looked outside, and saw white snow clouds. She stopped flattening the sheets, and went to the window. Tiny white, glistening snowflake's were falling to the ground lightly.

Liana decided she should probably do the shoveling now, before it started snowing too hard. She finished making her parents' bed, and went downstairs to get on her jacket, and snow pants.

"Lana, if Lacey wakes up, just press this button," Liana said as she was showing her sister how to use the walkie-talkie she gave her, "and tell me to come in. Ok? I'll have a walkie-talkie too, so we can talk even if you're inside, and I'm shoveling the driveway".

It was Liana's idea to use the walkie-talkies her dad had given her long ago -before the twins' were born. That way, if Lacey woke up, Liana would be able to come inside right away, and help her.

"Ok, Wiana". Said Lana, too engrossed watching Dora the Explorer to say anything more.

"Ok, Lana," Liana said, "thanks".

Liana kissed her sister on the forehead, checked on Lacey one more time, grabbed the snow shovel, and went to the front door.

When she opened the door, Liana felt cold wind whip across her cheek before she even stepped outside. Her parents had never bought her a hat, or a neckwarmer, OR a scarf, so her whole head was exposed to the freezing cold wind and snow.

Liana's eyes started watering, and her cheeks were already numb, but she stepped outside, and started by shoveling the steps.
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She was just about to reach the sidewalk that ran all through town, when she heard static coming from the walkie-talkie in her coat. She put the shovel down, pulled off one of her gloves, and pulled out the walkie-talkie.

"See's awa- *static* -crying alot. HURRY WIA- *static* - URRY!".

Liana stuffed her glove into her pocket along with the walkie-talkie, she snatched the shovel up, and she ran to the front door.

When she opened it, the first thing she heard was a sharp, high pitched screech coming from the nursery. She dropped the shovel, and was running to the nursery, when she heard a loud, "MOMMY! HELP ME!" coming from the room. and than, a loud *THUMP*.

Liana ran into the nursery, but stopped in her tracks halfway into the room... There was Lacey...

Thick, red blood trickling down her head.

Her body, limp.

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If you see any grammer errors, please tell me. And I hope you don't think I'm evil, or cruel or anything for that last part of the chapter. I'm just trying to build suspense.
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« Reply #34 on: July 06, 2008, 11:08:24 pm »

Well you've certainly done that!  I'm on the edge of my seat here, girl - write more write more!!

Welcome back, Holly - glad to see that you're continuing with your story.  Nice job.
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« Reply #35 on: July 07, 2008, 08:49:10 am »

Wow.......just......wow. That's all I can say about this chapter's ending.
Really unexpected.
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« Reply #36 on: July 07, 2008, 01:07:14 pm »

oh my gosh! i hope that she is okay!! this is great story telling for sure! please keep writing!! Smiley
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« Reply #37 on: July 07, 2008, 02:54:34 pm »

*PHEW!* I'm glad you liked that chapter. I was worried that the ending was a bit too much for a story that's just started. I guess I kinda like to get to the action really quickly, lol.

I swear that the next chapter will have pictures. I just really NEEDED to post that chapter, because I hadn't posted since May.

Thanks so much for the comments, I really appreciate them, and they make me really want to write more more MORE!
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Saz, I completely forgot about checking where I got the pj's. I'll check today when I go on.
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« Reply #38 on: July 08, 2008, 12:17:33 am »

Way to build suspense! I like this story. I don't mind if there are no pictures. And like the others: poor, poor Liana. And evil, evil parents! Can't wait for the next update. :happy8:

Not that I'm an expert or anything but just a tip on taking pics inside: try to take them with the walls up - it usually makes pictures look a bit tidier and... stuff. You can tell me if that's bad advice lol. I won't mind.
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« Reply #39 on: July 08, 2008, 12:21:01 am »

Omg. Very unexpected! It was really good though. I hope Lacey's okay =//
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« Reply #40 on: July 08, 2008, 08:09:35 am »

Oh, dear! Poor little Lacey! Things just keep getting worse and worse for poor Liana. I have no doubt she'll be blamed completely for the mishap.

You've left us a bit of a cliff hanger. Keep up the good work and like AF said, "welcome back".  :thumbrig:
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« Reply #41 on: July 08, 2008, 09:00:09 am »

o wow, i hope she'll be okay!
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« Reply #42 on: July 08, 2008, 09:19:35 am »

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..Not that I'm an expert or anything but just a tip on taking pics inside: try to take them with the walls up - it usually makes pictures look a bit tidier and... stuff. You can tell me if that's bad advice lol. I won't mind.
LOL! I KNOW! I hate the house I put them in. It's built in such a way, that it looks like the walls are down, when they're not! In one of the future chapters, I'm going to have to make them move to a new house, I just can't stand this one! It's the 'Helluva Haccienda' one, or whatever it's called.

Thank you all so much for your comments! They mean so much to me!

A little hint of what's coming in the next chapter...

"Lacey!" screamed Liana as she ran towards her sister. She lifted her sister out of her crib, and layed her on the floor.

"Please, Lacey! Don't do this!" Liana said in a shaky voice, as she felt her sister's pulse.
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« Reply #43 on: July 08, 2008, 11:58:20 am »

Oooh, i can't wait to read it!
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« Reply #44 on: July 08, 2008, 07:04:03 pm »

Lol 'Helluva Halenciaga' sounds like a helluva pain in the bum <-- look I made a pun isn't it brilliant? *cough* just ignore me... school hols are doing my head in...

I can't wait to read it as well. *update* *update* lol. Just kidding. Take your time.. I'll just lurk...
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