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WickedDiva
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« on: June 21, 2008, 12:58:30 am »

This is a story (well sort of) inspired by the new blogging feature in Free Time.
It tells the thoughts and fears of a young teenage boy called Ambrose Graystone, right through college and beyond.

Please feel free to comment, any constructive criticism is welcome

http://soniabigcheese-cosycornersims2.blogspot.com/
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« Reply #1 on: June 21, 2008, 06:23:45 pm »

From the one entry I read so far, I like it.

PROS:
-I loved how blunt the main character is.
-Main character's reaction to changing hair colors was good.
-old lady censoring the streaker was....well......epic.
-I thought cows and llamas hating each other was a rumor. Now I know it's fact.


NITPICKS:
-Several times, I saw thought bubbles. Remember: showheadlines off.
-See above, but with the plumbbob. Remember: PlumbBobToggle off.
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« Reply #2 on: June 22, 2008, 12:33:00 pm »

Quote from: SecretAgentZero;1282503
From the one entry I read so far, I like it.
NITPICKS:
-Several times, I saw thought bubbles. Remember: showheadlines off.
-See above, but with the plumbbob. Remember: PlumbBobToggle off.


I admit that some thought bubbles were genuine mistakes, but some were actually deliberate to try to get an insight with, not only the main character, but all those around him too.

Thanks for the constructive criticism anyway, it was much appreciated.
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« Reply #3 on: June 24, 2008, 03:00:45 pm »

Interesting premise. I like it!
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« Reply #4 on: July 06, 2008, 08:27:53 am »

Many apologies for being MIA (major health issues, ((hospitalised briefly)), won't go into great detail, feeling much better now)

But whilst I've been recovering and convalescing, I've managed to get a few more updates on Ambrose's adventures in college.

Because there have been a few chapters, you may want to recap to catch up.

They say that college is a lifetime experience.
Well that's certainly true for Ambrose, as he only ever expected just to study and gain skill points.

Please Note:
The latest chapter is picture heavy


http://soniabigcheese-cosycornersims2.blogspot.com/
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