Anyone interested in looking over some of my writing?

[Carlwashere]

I'm just asking for someone to review a short story of mine, give suggestions, suggest changes, add info, all that editor stuff. I've wanted a second opinion on a story I've been writing, and any help would be nice. Thanks to anyone that thinks it over.

[Theraven]

Is it a story you're going to post here?

[Carlwashere]

I don't really want to post it up, I was think a kind of PM post type thing.

[Theraven]

I meant post in the story forum when it is done

[Carlwashere]

If someone thinks it's okay, sure. Are you interested?

[Theraven]

Well, maybe. What is the story about? And is it very long?

(Just so you know - English isn't my first language, which means that I'm not 100% fluent, but I've read and written stories in English for a while now, so I think my grammar should be more than acceptable )

[Carlwashere]

Got it, it's about two roommates, one of whom is an alcoholic, its just like an intro right now, only 3 pages.

[Theraven]

I don't mind looking over it

[Carlwashere]

Cool, I'll send it to you over PM.
Edit: Your inbox is full. 

[Theraven]

Now there's room

[Carlwashere]

Ok, thanks for looking over it for me.

[Theraven]

Sent you a PM

[Carlwashere]

I got it, Thanks so much for the help, your tips were very helpful! I'll keep you updated on the story. By the way, I'm only in 10th grade english, so I'm still learning english myself. I hope it becomes something amazing!  
Edit: Sorry for leaving you with a cliffhanger! 

[Theraven]

Good luck

[Carlwashere]

Try and keep some space in your inbox, so I can send you updates. I'm starting chapter 2 now.