Murda/Urban Gangstas - 10/23/2007 - Update - The Road Splits In The Courtroom
Veckah:
Sorry I haven't commented sooner, but it has been a VERY long week and weekend. This chapter gave me chills again. Junior and his "What's my name" is such a abusive tendency phrase. His 'tender' dehumanization of Rita is truly frightening, calling her girl instead of her name, demanding her obedience in everything... *shiver* It reminds me of some of the cases I have read on PervertedJustice.com.
vita4all:
Thanks and hugs all, for the comments, insights, opinions, and support. I'm glad you're loving the story.
Veckah, I knew these last two chapters would be chilling to many, although there are those who don't have a problem with Junior and Rita's relationship and beliefs (except for Junior's threat to whip her with a belt if she doesn't obey him.) Yep, Junior's pretty clear about his expectations as well his love and passion for her. No grey areas whatsoever... with her.
Also, I never heard of that website, pervertedjustice.com. I'll check it out. I take it that his behavior and one of the favorite photos I did conveyed this view of Junior. I love Photoshop. He almost looks Egyptian from the time of the pyramids, doesn't he? I've got another odd one I'll be using soon.
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Tenshii~Akari:
Aww, that was such a tease! :tongue3:
It's funny though... two completely different people whose lives depend on each other... well, in this case, one that's in a life or death situation. Jamal is so sure of himself, but who knows what could happen between the appearance in court and the verdict.
I'll be waiting patiently for Junior's take. :angel: (I'm sure it'll blow me away! :lol:)
Ali Xavier:
Part 1 on Rita was amazing. From the frying pan and into the fire! Junior might turn out to be a good husband, and they definitly have the chemistry in bed, but Junior missed his calling. He'd make a helluva pimp. Part 2 and 3 were short but I liked them, especially this from Jamal:
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Pain in my life has always been there and always will be. It's part of my life like the sun... and like that big ball of fire in the sky, it hurts too much to look at directly.
A lot of brothas can identify with this, but I'd like to know a little more about his pain other than his baby's mama cheating on him. Your fans are waiting for Part 4!
vita4all:
Thank you Diesel, Ali, Tenshii, Veckah, Moon, ElvenSong and FeistyRedhead[/B] for your insights, feedback and comments, and to my other readers.
Ali - You're getting your wish in Part 4 re: insight on how Jamal (and Junior and Che) developed into the people they are.
Diesel - I really appreciate your throwing out a little different point of view. As scary as Junior is some, other women find raw confidence, complete control over others seductive, rather than abusive. But as you said, for many, it gets old.
FeistyRedhead - Yep, see above, and I'm glad you're loving the story.
Tenshii - I like that term you used, prison check, in describing how Rita's parents behaved when she got home. Considering what an angel Rita's been all her life and parents' lifestyle, her elopement to the son of a mobster hit them like a tornado.
ElvenSong - Heh-heh, glad you can relate to Rita's folks and thanks for sharing your experience with the belt and strict parents. It's awfully common in families all over the world.
Moon - Yep, you hit it on the bullseye: Junior's molding Rita like clay. He'll reveal why in this next part. Also, hope you learn how to use the photo tip I gave you. You too, Tenshii.
Veckah - Hugs, and you know why.
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