From the one entry I read so far, I like it.
NITPICKS:
-Several times, I saw thought bubbles. Remember: showheadlines off.
-See above, but with the plumbbob. Remember: PlumbBobToggle off.
I admit that some thought bubbles were genuine mistakes, but some were actually deliberate to try to get an insight with, not only the main character, but all those around him too.
Thanks for the constructive criticism anyway, it was much appreciated.