WELL! It's up! Ok. If you wanna carry on the movie script way, fine, but it's a bit easier to understand if it's just normal.
Your pictures are beautiful! Type in this cheat - plumbbobtoggle off to get rid of that green thing, works wonders. And make sure that your walls are up in every shot, kay? After all, we can't actually see through walls!
*i wish*
Your writing is great - you use great phrases. But remember, a capital letter at the start of each sentence and at the start of someone's name, and a full stop at the end of each sentence. You'll do just fine if you remember these simple rules.
Apart from that, it's perfect! I cannot WAIT for the next chapter! Well done on getting this up, by the way.
I'm here waiting for your next update!
